... that when cyclist J. Nash McCrea, who was nicknamed "Crash," competed at the Olympics, he caused a crash that took out eight competitors? Source: America's First Olympics pp. 128, 129 (note that it first says you can't view page 129, but then when you hit "clear search" it allows you to)
Overall: Article is long enough, 5x expanded as required, no apparent copyright or plagiarism, QPQ complete. BeanieFan11, please expand reference 6. Bare URLs are not allowed for DYK, and this is close to that. Hook is technically short enough but a bit too detailed IMO and could be improved. Some suggestions below. Airborne84 (talk) 01:56, 8 March 2023 (UTC)
ALT1: ... that cyclist J. Nash McCrea, nicknamed "Crash," caused a major crash at the Olympics?
ALT2: ... that cyclist J. Nash McCrea who caused a major crash at the 1904 Olympics was nicknamed "Crash"?
@Airborne84: Ref six is not a bare url, it says '"1904 Summer Olympics - 5 miles, men". Olympedia.' – I don't think it could be expanded further. As for the hooks, I think ALT1 is alright, not as big a fan of ALT2. What about these:
ALT3: ... that when cyclist J. Nash McCrea, nicknamed "Crash," competed at the Olympics, he caused a crash that took out eight competitors?
ALT4: ... that when cyclist J. Nash McCrea, nicknamed "Crash," competed at the Olympics, he caused a major crash?
Thanks BeanieFan11. I expanded that reference slightly. If anything looks inaccurate, feel free to revert. The other edit I made was a mistake, but I was interrupted and you reverted before I could. ALT3 isn't bad, I just think it's implied he competed at the Olympics. If someone wants to know if he did, the hook just pulled them in. No issues with ALT 5 or 6, although I have no knowledge of the queue for April Fools Day. I leave the hook to the promoter. I prefer ALT1. ALT3 also works. If we are looking for material for April Fools Day, ALT5 and ALT6 are fine as well. Thanks!Airborne84 (talk) 01:26, 9 March 2023 (UTC)